Tuesday, April 24, 2012

Letter "U" - Ultimatum

We both opened our eyes at the sound of someone loudly clearing their throat.  A man stood behind us.  Could have been handsome were it not for the lifeless eyes he exposed when he pulled the shades from his face.  Was that a maggot swaying in his empty sockets?  Mischief curled his lips.  Evil pulsed from every fiber of his being.  Only one person could hold that much vile within a thing of beauty.

Drakar.

I opened my mouth to speak, but my breath caught in my throat.  A silver chain dangled from his hand with a cross and the familiar custom made "Q" commissioned to Father Quanon.  The holy scriptures normally surrounding the charm had to have been broken.  The once lively ink coursing through the letter's curves swirled dull, clinging to life...much like Drakar's eyes.

"Father Quanon..." slipped from my lips, just above a whisper.

Drakar's voice grated against my hearing though it may have sounded smooth to a normal person.  "Your life for his, Red Riding Hood.  Deal's only good til midnight.  Then his soul is mine."

Drakar tossed the chain.  I caught it midair.  The ink still swirled so Father Quanon was still alive.  But for how long?****

What happened with Father Quanon?  Will she take Drakar's deal?

35 comments:

  1. holy cow!!!! eeek! yikes! that's all i can say, LOL
    nice tension. can't wait to find out what happens next :)

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    1. Thanks, Cristina. We're getting down to the last few letters :-)

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  2. Intense scene! Are you creating these as you go? Very impressive!

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    1. Thanks, Cate. Yes, I'm doing these as I go. I get to the letter then try to think of a good word to use. When I get a few word ideas in my head, I think of which one would apply to moving the story forward or providing some interesting back story. Because I originally thought up the Abigail and Basil theme for just the A to Z blogging challenge, each letter was meant to be a challenge, a writing exercise in a serial format. But with the interest shown, these letters will provide the basis for me writing up a novella or novel of their story.

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  3. That's intense! I second Cate's question: are you making these up as you go along?

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    1. Glad you enjoyed it, Sangu. Yep, making it up as I go along :-)

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  4. A MAGGOT swaying in his socket?! Eeeeek!

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    1. Yeah, the maggot just throws his whole perfect look off wonderfully :-)

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  5. I was totally cringing through that scene. Great description!

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  6. eww! - scary description! I hope she saves Father Quanon, or that she and Basil will work together to save him somehow.

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    1. I have a feeling the story is not ending with the last letter of the challenge. Yes, I confess. I have not finished all the letters.

      *ducks*

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  7. Good imagery, delivered tightly! Great descriptions...

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  8. Intriguing! What choo gon' do with this after the challenge is what I wanna know. I like it. You've raised the stakes again.

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    1. Well, J.L., I've had several people mention they enjoyed it and would like to see it in a novel or novella format. I've been humbled by that and have taken that as my new challenge. The working title of it is NEVERLOVE.

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  9. Intense! And a maggot...eww...but, wow, that nailed his appearance. I'm thinking Father Quanon sacrificed himself for Abby. Part of me wants Abby to save him but I also don't want to see his sacrifice be wasted. Darn it all woman, you have me on pins and needles.

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    1. Yeah, I got a little loopy with the maggot lol!!! But so very Drakar.

      The end for this challenge will not be the end for this couple so keep that in mind when the end for the challenge comes. :-)

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  10. OMG how can she make a decision like that?! Did you coin the phrase "blog opera"? Cuz that is genius. All I need is the dramatic "dun dun dun" background music.

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    1. Not sure if I coined it or not. But blog opera seemed the best way to describe the craziness that has been Abby and Basil meeting and getting to this place.

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  11. I kept picturing the Drakars from The Wheel of Time, and I think that gave this a slightly different meaning for me than what I was meant to read ;)

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    1. That's okay, Charlie. This Drakar is just a really bad, bad...thing. Can't call him a man.

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  12. One life for another - crappy choice.

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    1. Yeah, life can be so full of crappy choices.

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  13. Wow, she's got a tough decision to make and only a short time to make it.

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    1. Gives a whole new meaning to deadline.

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  14. Such great tension. You have me wondering what happens next.

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    1. Thanks, Medeia. This challenge has been an amazing experience.

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  15. Things are really hotting up now! Love the tension in this installation!

    J.C. Martin
    A to Z Blogger

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  16. Wonderfully creeptastic description of Drakar. Ugh, the maggot. Up again go the stakes. Wow.

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  17. This one was super eerie, Angela. Drakar is the epitome of evil.

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