Thursday, September 22, 2011 | By: Angela Brown

Where did Rach get those words???

So it's Challenge #2 for the Writer's Platform-Building Campaign and I'm dazed and confused.  Where did Rach find these words?  Here are the instructions:
The Challenge is:
Write a blog post in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should:
  • include the word "imago" in the title
  • include the following 4 random words: "miasma," "lacuna," "oscitate," "synchronicity,"
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional and included in the word count), make reference to a mirror in your post.
For those who want an even greater challenge (optional), make your post 200 words EXACTLY!

I've completed mine.  I think my brain was on "fried mode" but I hope you can at least enjoy what I threw together.  In the end, this was actually fun to do :-)


Fractured Imago

The wicked queen?
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That tired old hag?  She’s got nothing on us.  Mirror, mirror on the wall told her so.  But he got it wrong.  Snow White’s a toad stool.  My sister saw to that.

After Cinderella married Prince Charming, we had to leave.  Staying in her happily ever after would never work.  Fairy godmother created a lacuna in the section of our fairy tale just before The End.  Such a dear, she loved those mice.  It only took ending the squeals of one to get what we wanted, our exit and her wand.
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We arrived in the queen’s chamber of conceit.  Seriously, how often does a girl need a pair of milky eyes and copper toned lips to appear in a miasma of fog to tell you how gorgeous you are?  Surprised, the queen oscitated.  Her blood red lips formed a round O.  Her hesitation made it quick work to steal the kingdom.  The good fairy’s wand dispatched her to a fitting fate, forever encased in gold and glass with that ego booster of hers.


We forever claimed the land’s already existent good fortune on the synchronicity of our arrival and lived our own happily ever after.
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87 comments:

Anonymous said...

I enjoyed this Angela. I like the fairy tale metaphors and that the narrator chooses to create their own happy ever after instead of depending on someone else to deliver it to them. Refreshing!

elizabethanne said...

Loved it, Angela! Great morph on the well-known tale. I wouldn't put it past the stepsisters to have done something like this.

Jennifer Pickrell said...

Hah, love the twist on a classic tale!

Angela Brown said...

@ Christy - Thanks for checking it out.

@ Elizabeth - Weren't they just an ugly pair?

@ Jennifer - fun doing a clash of fairy tales

Angie Cothran said...

I love the fairy tale take on the challenge. You did it well. And I'm with you those words were a beast!

Angela Brown said...

Thanks Angie. And yes, those words through me for an uber loop.

Lady Gwen said...

Oh Angela, this was so awesome! Did you have to look up the words? I have no clue what half of them mean!

Angela Brown said...

Oh my goodness yes...I had something of a clue about miasma but those others...sheesh. I Googled the heck out of them lol!!! Rach outdid herself with this challenge.

Christine Tyler said...

Ha! I hope it wasn't Gus-gus...

Angela Brown said...

Re: Gus-Gus - Well...now...lol!!! What can I say??

Sheery said...

Well done, ANgela! I like the fairy tale twist of your story. I'm so glad I'm not the only one who had to look up some of Rach's word choices.

David Powers King said...

Brilliant! Way to use those words and make them work. Hard to make unfamiliar words work. You've got no problem with that.

Great job, Angela! :)

K.T. Hanna said...

Brain fried or not, I love fairy tales so this spoke to me a little more than I should be willing to admit ;)
So glad others had to look up some of the words!

Nadja Notariani said...

Angela ~ This is just great! I love the opening; it hooked me right away! Your 'fairy tales gone wrong' meme is spot on for a unique entry. It's sure to be a favorite. ~ Nadja

Angela Brown said...

@ Sheery - Thank you. Yeah, Google was a friend today for sure.

@ David - Thank you so much. After reading your awesome poetic take, I was just floored.

@ K. T. - I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

@ Nadja - That would be nice...though I admit I am thrilled just to have comments like yours :-)

ali cross said...

This was fantastic! I loved it!

Anonymous said...

Love it! You had me completely with this fairy tale twist. Great work with a tricky challenge. Those words are hard.

Angela Brown said...

@ ali - I'm happy you enjoyed it :-)

@ Raelyn - Yeah, the words, whew...definite challenge.

Rance said...

Ooh! I was taken aback (in a good way) by the retelling of a well-known fairy tale. It's a perfect kind of story in which to use those words, as they're both pretty and fantastic! I think it takes just as much creativity to retell a story in your own way than to make up a brand new one!

Susie Medwell said...

Wow, love your style, really poetic piece.

Angela Brown said...

Thanks so much Rance. Rach said she was amping up the challenge and this was no joke. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Angela Brown said...

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it, Susie.

Anonymous said...

Great job. I found this challenge hard. Mine is #29

Angela Brown said...

I agree Bridget...it was definitely hard...but fun once I could wrap my head around the challenge words :-)

Kurt Hartwig said...

What a great deconstruction of fairy tale rules.

Angela Brown said...

Thanks so much for checking out my story, Kurt. There are so many great responses to this challenge. I'm in awe of our talent pool. It's so amazing.

Mandy said...

Wow! Those words were panic-indusing!!

What a great job you did with the challenge.

PS...I'm a total Gus-Gus lover too!!!

Mandy :)

Tara Tyler said...

love the twist and the picture is perfect!

Jen said...

I actually really like the step-sisters in this, despite what they did to the mouse! What a fun read!
Mine is #3.

Angela Brown said...

@ Mandy - now I'm sitting here thinking...if I ever decided to make this novella length, I'd have to spare Gus-Gus or the readers would spear me lol!!!

@ Tara - the pictures were sort of last minute. I had fun looking for them.

@ Jen - Thanks Jen for checking out my story. Making sure I've given a good gander of yours

Michael Haynes said...

Great job at getting those tricky words to work! Wasn't this challenge interesting?

If you haven't stopped by to check mine out yet, it's #42. (I was thrilled -- Douglas Adams and Jackie Robinson -- such an auspicious number.)

Matthew MacNish said...

Wow. What fun! Great work, Angela.

Sonia Lal said...

Loved this twist on the fairy tale! LOL Lots of fun to read.

Angela Brown said...

@ Michael - Dear me it was very tricky and really interesting.

@ Matt - Thanks. As tricky and interesting as it was, it was fun.

Angela Brown said...

Thank you so much for stopping by Sonia. Glad you had fun reading it.

Ruth Hartman Berge said...

Great idea to put this in fractured fairy tale form. I thought it was great.

F.E. Sewell said...

Oh fun! I like how the twist was introduced at the beginning instead of the end. It kind of allowed us to discover their world. :)

Angela Brown said...

@ Ruth - Great call on that "fractured fairy tale". I'm glad it worked out well.

@ F. E. Sewell - I tried the other way first but quickly changed because it wouldn't work with the word count. This way did much better for me.

Cheryl said...

Great story and imaginative use of the words. Love crossing the fairytales, really original!

Jamie McHenry said...

Such a fun use of the words. I love it! Good luck with the contest.

Angela Brown said...

@ Cheryl - Thanks so much. It was fun putting this together.

@ Jamie - Thanks. I wish you be best of luck as well. Back to the linky to check out some more :-)

Christine Rains said...

Ha! Nice twist. I love extensions and retellings of fairy tales. Great job!

J said...

Hahaha, awesome! This post was light-hearted and funny, and told and engaging story. Well done! :)

Angela Brown said...

@ Christine - I found this especially challenging but a great deal of fun.

@ J - Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. I so appreciate it.

Anonymous said...

I'm a sucker for fairy tales, so I think it's awesome that your piece has those elements. Awesome job, by the way.

Angela Brown said...

Thank you so much Medeia. I'm wondering would it would be like to make a mash-up like this. The Shrek movies did a cool job of it.

Ann said...

Two fairy tales for the price of one and in such a challenge. Well done.

Angela Brown said...

Thanks Ann. That's a cool way of looking at it.

LadyJai said...

I love fairy tales! This was just wonderful!

Angela Brown said...

Thanks for stopping by LadyJai. There are so many great entries for this challenge, so many different takes and creative views. I'm loving it.

Cortney said...

Loved the fairy tale twist!

Angela Brown said...

Thanks so much for visiting Cortney.

Zan Marie said...

Too cute! Great job. You've got a vote from me. ; )

Angela Brown said...

Thanks Zan Marie! I appreciate it very much.

Mel Corbett said...

I like the fairy tale twist. Good on the stepsisters to take their fate into their own hands. I like it, especially how you managed to make the words flow into yours. I'm afraid mine might feel like an 8th grade vocab-word story.

Angela Brown said...

Thanks for checking out my story Mel. I'm sure your entry is every bit as brilliant as the many others we have as part of this challenge.

Cynthia Lee said...

Good job, Angela! I haven't started mine yet and I'm kinda inwardly groaning over it.

Those are hard words! :)

Clar http://clarbojahn.wordpress.com/ said...

Wonderful twist! Good going! Love the take on the fairytale. :) Never thought to google the words. Some weren't even in my websters. I wonder if they weren't mispelled? :)

Doreen McGettigan said...

Oh I love the fairy tale. Very creative spin:)

Myne Whitman said...

It was really ingenuous how you turned the fairy tales on their head, lol..

Jess said...

Wow I really loved this! Great job!
(I'm entry #113)

Angela Brown said...

@ Cynthia - Writing it will turn out to be the easy part, it's figuring out what the words mean that was hardest for me lol!!!

@ Clar - I thought that "oscitate" was misspelled but I kept finding it spelled the exact way Rach provided it.

@ Doreen and Myne - Thanks so much. I had fun with it, though those words were something to work with.

@ Jess - I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I've enjoyed reading the many other entrants. So many talented writers.

MyTricksterGod said...

This was very enjoyable.
It was like a new sculpturing on the fairy tales that I love... and hate for particular reasons.
It took me back to Maguire's works.
You know how to turn a FT upside-down

Angela Brown said...

Thanks MyTricksterGod. It was interesting working out this short piece.

K said...

Awesome Angela! I have tried and tried to write a 200 word piece with these words, but each time it just comes out absurd. Yours is fantastic and really works so well. I love it!

Angela Brown said...

Thanks so much K! I still can't help wondering where in the world she got these words. lol!!!

Cherie Colyer said...

Terrific entry Angela. I love that you thought of a way to include Snow White. :)

Francesca Zappia said...

I loved this! I think this is the first time I've seen a challenge done this way. Great job!

Angela Brown said...

@ Cherie and Francesca - Thanks to both of you. It was definitely a challenge but an enjoyable one.

alberta ross said...

oh I did enjoy this - well done

Angela Brown said...

Thank you very much, alberta.

Carrie Butler said...

What a fun twist on fairy tales! Great work, Angela. I loved it! :)

Angela Brown said...

Thanks Carrie. Glad you enjoyed it.

Maria said...

Love the way you've de-constructed the fairytale to do this challenge.

Angela Brown said...

Thank you for checking it out, Maria. :-)

Angela Orlowski-Peart said...

Awesome, Angela - a great twist to my favorite fairy tale :-)

Angela Brown said...

Angela! So nice to have you visit and thanks for checking out my submission. It was a fun challenge.

Candy Fite said...

Now, that's what I call having a blast with words! Nice job, Angela!

Carla said...

Great fairy tale twist! That was so fun to read! I do love fairy tale stories!

Angela Brown said...

@ Candy - I appreciate you stopping by and I had fun with my fairy tale.

@ Carla - I'm glad you enjoyed it :-)

the wild magnolia said...

Snow White gone Campaign Challenge.

Creative writing, good job.

#188

Angela Brown said...

Thanks wild magnolia. Going to check out some more. :-)

Karen deBlieck said...

Love this new take on an old fairytale. It made me smile.

If you have the chance check out mine at 189. :)

AveryMarsh said...

Aw, poor mice. ;) Fantastic voice. And I love the imagery. "The Queen's chamber of conceit." More, please.

Angela Brown said...

@ Karen - Thanks so much for stopping by :-)

@ Avery - Thanks so much. It was fun doing this, though those words were something else.

kmckendry said...

I like the twist. I'm glad the Queen got what she deserved! Great entry.

I'm at #183.

Angela Brown said...

@ kmckendry - Thanks for checking out my entry.

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