Tuesday, April 24, 2012 | By: Angela Brown

Letter "U" - Ultimatum

We both opened our eyes at the sound of someone loudly clearing their throat.  A man stood behind us.  Could have been handsome were it not for the lifeless eyes he exposed when he pulled the shades from his face.  Was that a maggot swaying in his empty sockets?  Mischief curled his lips.  Evil pulsed from every fiber of his being.  Only one person could hold that much vile within a thing of beauty.

Drakar.

I opened my mouth to speak, but my breath caught in my throat.  A silver chain dangled from his hand with a cross and the familiar custom made "Q" commissioned to Father Quanon.  The holy scriptures normally surrounding the charm had to have been broken.  The once lively ink coursing through the letter's curves swirled dull, clinging to life...much like Drakar's eyes.

"Father Quanon..." slipped from my lips, just above a whisper.

Drakar's voice grated against my hearing though it may have sounded smooth to a normal person.  "Your life for his, Red Riding Hood.  Deal's only good til midnight.  Then his soul is mine."

Drakar tossed the chain.  I caught it midair.  The ink still swirled so Father Quanon was still alive.  But for how long?****

What happened with Father Quanon?  Will she take Drakar's deal?

35 comments:

Cristina said...

holy cow!!!! eeek! yikes! that's all i can say, LOL
nice tension. can't wait to find out what happens next :)

Cate Masters said...

Intense scene! Are you creating these as you go? Very impressive!

Sangu Mandanna said...

That's intense! I second Cate's question: are you making these up as you go along?

Julie Dao said...

A MAGGOT swaying in his socket?! Eeeeek!

Deana said...

I was totally cringing through that scene. Great description!

Angela Brown said...

Thanks, Cristina. We're getting down to the last few letters :-)

Angela Brown said...

Thanks, Cate. Yes, I'm doing these as I go. I get to the letter then try to think of a good word to use. When I get a few word ideas in my head, I think of which one would apply to moving the story forward or providing some interesting back story. Because I originally thought up the Abigail and Basil theme for just the A to Z blogging challenge, each letter was meant to be a challenge, a writing exercise in a serial format. But with the interest shown, these letters will provide the basis for me writing up a novella or novel of their story.

Angela Brown said...

Glad you enjoyed it, Sangu. Yep, making it up as I go along :-)

Tyrean Martinson said...

eww! - scary description! I hope she saves Father Quanon, or that she and Basil will work together to save him somehow.

Writer Pat Newcombe said...

Good imagery, delivered tightly! Great descriptions...

Angela Brown said...

Yeah, the maggot just throws his whole perfect look off wonderfully :-)

Angela Brown said...

Thanks, Deana. Glad you enjoyed it.

Angela Brown said...

I have a feeling the story is not ending with the last letter of the challenge. Yes, I confess. I have not finished all the letters.

*ducks*

Angela Brown said...

Thank you very much, Writer Pat :-)

J.L. Campbell said...

Intriguing! What choo gon' do with this after the challenge is what I wanna know. I like it. You've raised the stakes again.

Raelyn Barclay said...

Intense! And a maggot...eww...but, wow, that nailed his appearance. I'm thinking Father Quanon sacrificed himself for Abby. Part of me wants Abby to save him but I also don't want to see his sacrifice be wasted. Darn it all woman, you have me on pins and needles.

J. A. Bennett said...

Great flash fiction once again!

Angela Cothran said...

Love it. Love it. Love it.

Lady Gwen said...

OMG how can she make a decision like that?! Did you coin the phrase "blog opera"? Cuz that is genius. All I need is the dramatic "dun dun dun" background music.

Charlie Holmberg said...

I kept picturing the Drakars from The Wheel of Time, and I think that gave this a slightly different meaning for me than what I was meant to read ;)

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

One life for another - crappy choice.

Clarissa Draper said...

Wow, she's got a tough decision to make and only a short time to make it.

Angela Brown said...

Well, J.L., I've had several people mention they enjoyed it and would like to see it in a novel or novella format. I've been humbled by that and have taken that as my new challenge. The working title of it is NEVERLOVE.

Angela Brown said...

Yeah, I got a little loopy with the maggot lol!!! But so very Drakar.

The end for this challenge will not be the end for this couple so keep that in mind when the end for the challenge comes. :-)

Angela Brown said...

Thanks, J.A. Glad you enjoyed it.

Angela Brown said...

Awww... Thanks, Angela :-)

Angela Brown said...

Not sure if I coined it or not. But blog opera seemed the best way to describe the craziness that has been Abby and Basil meeting and getting to this place.

Angela Brown said...

That's okay, Charlie. This Drakar is just a really bad, bad...thing. Can't call him a man.

Angela Brown said...

Yeah, life can be so full of crappy choices.

Medeia Sharif said...

Such great tension. You have me wondering what happens next.

Angela Brown said...

Gives a whole new meaning to deadline.

Angela Brown said...

Thanks, Medeia. This challenge has been an amazing experience.

J.C. Martin said...

Things are really hotting up now! Love the tension in this installation!

J.C. Martin
A to Z Blogger

Leslie Rose said...

Wonderfully creeptastic description of Drakar. Ugh, the maggot. Up again go the stakes. Wow.

Susan Oloier said...

This one was super eerie, Angela. Drakar is the epitome of evil.

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